Love That Cat又有新的版本了

写儿童故事几年,终于鼓起勇气给大家看,请您多提宝贵意见。
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亲爱的同网朋友,我最近一直在改我的故事,我的Love That Cat又有新的版本了。这次的修改是历史性的,我将原来的84 verses的长故事,分成6章,每一章讲一个相对独立的小故事。这样一来,孩子们读起来轻松些,章与章之间能有个break停顿,将来还可以在这些地方配上插图。





过两天,我再贴新的版本。下面是改的几个verses



(old)



I named the new cat Mimi.



She would be my best friend.



A good time together,



We would happily spend.



(new)



I named the new cat Mimi.



She'd be my best friend, I knew.



We'd happily play together.



I'd be her best friend, too!








(old)



I went to her round plate.



A bit of cat food,I took.



I pretended to eatit.



She came closer to look.



(new)



I went to Mimi's plate and



Took some cat food, with a smile.



I pretended to eat it.



She stared at me for a while.







(old)



Let's solve the mystery.



Mimi made up her mind.



Behind the big mirror,



A clue, she went to find.



(new)



Mimi made up her mind



Let's solve the mystery now.



She went behind the mirror.



I heard her sharply say,"Meow!"
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