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女儿的短篇小说

I Still Haven't Found What I'm Looking for。。。
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女儿九岁,酷爱读书.去年忽然决定参加学校的短篇小说比赛.第一次写得了年级第一.俺这当羊妈的异常激动.从没写过博克.但决定将此文章发表,共有子女的家长共享.

 The Twelve Wolves of Destiny!

In a misty and very cold forest, there was a wolf just born. She was white and had blue eyes. Her parents named her Snowdrop. Her future was a secret that even fortune tellers wolfs from the North couldn’t see.

You might be wondering why her fortune could never be seen. Well, it’s a long story but I’ll tell you anyway.

Snowdrop was no ordinary animal. She was one of the chosen wolves of destiny. Now that’s why, legendary wolves’ future cannot be seen. There was a legend that 12 wolves would answer the call, of goodness falling and evil rising. Another animal will help their way. They shall stop evil, and good shall rule again. So the world will live in a barrier of peace for a long time to come.

When she was older, she learned to hunt her prey and to work together with the pack. Highly royal wolves came from the woods looking for the members of The 12 wolves of destiny. They tested every single wolf in the Arctic to see who the 12 were.

Snowdrop got picked with 11 other wolves. They were Cathie, Scout, Athena, Percy, Jason, Annebeth, Kate, Bob, Steve, Piper, Tyler. They were all Snowdrops’ age except for Bob who was a year younger. They all greeted each other with excitement of the new quest ahead.

The leader of Snowdrops’ pack stood tall and said “You were chosen by destiny to make evil retreat our earth. Sapphire will explain and guide you on your quest. Do not underestimate her. An artic fox leaped through the snow landing at the wolves’ feet. Bob said” so this is the great and powerful Sapphire, an artic fox?” “Didn’t I say not to underestimate her.” said the leader of the pack. Bob groaned. “Let begin our quest!” said Sapphire.

They ran for hours and Snowdrop couldn’t see because of a blizzard. They FINALLY stopped for the night. Sapphire huddled between two trees and the wolves slept in the snow. Their eyes drifted away into a nights rest.

Snowdrop had the worst nightmare of her whole life. There was this weird creature that looked like a were wolf with wings and could breathe fire. It said “You must be perished from the universe so evil can destroy the earth.” She was chained from a rope above magma. The creature took out a knife and cut the rope leaving her falling to her death. She woke up with a start waking everyone else up except Bob who was dreaming of hamburgers.

Piper and Percy howled, they were trapped in a cage. Sapphire was small enough to squeeze out of the cage. She ran away to get them out of there. She ran into the same creature Snowdrop dreamed of. The creature said “We are the dragburto’s. We only need one wolf, that one.” He pointed to snowdrop. Sapphire growled and attacked them. She was swift, fast, and tough. She knocked the creature down. Alarms blared. She knocked down the dragburitos and ran towards a button that would set free the wolves. She hopped on the button and the wolves were set free.

They knocked over the monsters and Annebeth found an object that the dragburto’s were upsets with, there eggs. She picked up the eggs with her teeth and shattering them a mile away. The dragburitos flew towards there precious eggs determined to save them. They had survived the monsters.

Jason found a piece of parchment and started to read. There’s a legend that would answer the call, bleh! I already know that one. He skipped to the end. “The end of the war will be in California, to evil of good, the world’s fate leads to this battle. “ Snowdrop said” Now we know what we are doing! All we need to do is find a map and go to California. Does anyone have a map?” “Why would any wolf carry a map around?” said Athena. “Wait, wait, and here it is.” Athena yelped in shock. Athena said” Why would you bring a map, Steve.” “Always comes in handy. Okay. This is a magical map. It can show us where we are. Okay, we are in Texas. All we need to do is run another 1,318 miles.” “WHAT!” Jason yelped. ”How long is that going to take. “?About a week nonstop.” Said Steve. “This is going to be a nightmare unless we find a train. Well, speaking of trains, there was a train that just pulled up on our right to go to Arizona and it will only take a few hours. Then we can take it Arizona to California. Say, where in California is this?” “It says at the bottom of the page in small print San Diego. Yay, we can go to the zoo! Said Tyler sarcastically. Let’s get moving! Said Sapphire.

They ran onto the train before it could leave. They talked about the quest. It was quite boring. This is how it went.

Annebeth: This is taking FOREVER. Percy: Stop complaining. Snowdrop: Be quite, both of you. Let’s think about the task in hands. We can run to California of ride a train, which one? Bob: Lets run. Tyler: okay…

A few hours later…


“We are finally in Arizona. “ Said Sapphire “Is everybody ready to run?” “Yes!” The twelve of them said at the same time. They ran for hours and there was finally a sign that said Welcome to San Diego. Snowdrop then started a conversation. “Why did they want me?” “Maybe because they need you for something special.” Said Athena. “Well, I did have a dream about the dragburitos. They said something about killing me so the universe can fall.” Explained Snowdrop. “Let’s think of something else, okay?” said Sapphire. “OK” said Snowdrop.

They walked a little bit further but then a dark cloud with purple lightning flashed through the sky. Evil’s powers were getting stronger. The twelve (thirteen counting Sapphire) ran to the heart of the cloud where evils armies were waiting for them. Sapphire said “Everybody, I know that there is a leader for this pack of monsters. He is at the top of the building, Snowdrop; evil must fear you most if they want you destroyed. Go and defeat him” “Okay:” said snowdrop.

They last battle has begun. Monsters charged at the twelve animals. Snowdrop was avoiding monsters and racing to the top. When she got there, there was a figure in a black clock waiting for her. It turned around and said “So you are the great Snowdrop? I heard rumors about you.” Snowdrop yelps. The guy was a black wolf with red eyes. He had a red diamond on his back and called himself The Red Diamond. He attacked Snowdrop.

She was dodging and not getting hurt. The guy only trusted his jaw, not his brain. When Snowdrop dodged it in front of a wall, CRASH! He bonked into the wall. She kept on doing what she just did. BING BAM CRASH BOOM! He was knocked out from his head bonking into the wall to many times. She made him crash his head one more time and POOF! He turned into a trail of black smoke. The monsters disappeared in seconds, the cloud turned back to white. She defeated The Red Diamond!

She met with the others and told them about her victory. When she got back home, she was the leader of the tribe and every wolf called her and the others heroes. Evil still stirs. What will it do next? No one knows but at least it is peaceful in the world.


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• 赞! -ca981-给 ca981 发送悄悄话 ca981 的博客首页 ca981 的个人群组 (0 bytes) (3 reads) 2/25/13 05:11:30
• 谢谢! 我这个老妈一点功劳都没有. -长在红旗下-给 长在红旗下 发送悄悄话 长在红旗下 的博客首页 长在红旗下 的个人群组 (0 bytes) (2 reads) 2/25/13 06:40:15
• 功劳是有的。太谦虚。 -x88-给 x88 发送悄悄话 x88 的个人群组 (0 bytes) (2 reads) 2/25/13 08:45:05
• 有才!! -迷迷-给 迷迷 发送悄悄话 迷迷 的个人群组 (0 bytes) (2 reads) 2/25/13 05:16:18
• 谢谢。女儿从五岁半才开始读书,四年不到已超过老妈,不可思议! -长在红旗下-给 长在红旗下 发送悄悄话 长在红旗下 的博客首页 长在红旗下 的个人群组 (0 bytes) (4 reads) 2/25/13 06:29:15
• 行文不错。 -CirrusCloud-给 CirrusCloud 发送悄悄话 CirrusCloud 的博客首页 CirrusCloud 的个人群组 (0 bytes) (2 reads) 2/25/13 06:16:24
• 回复:行文不错。 -长在红旗下-给 长在红旗下 发送悄悄话 长在红旗下 的博客首页 长在红旗下 的个人群组 (1640 bytes) (68 reads) 2/25/13 06:27:19
  谢谢各位,献丑了。女儿从五岁半才开始读书,四年不到已超过老妈,不可思议!
• 她平常很喜欢写吗? 喜欢一夲书反复读吗? -CirrusCloud-给 CirrusCloud 发送悄悄话 CirrusCloud 的博客首页 CirrusCloud 的个人群组 (0 bytes) (1 reads) 2/25/13 06:31:06
• 她平常除学校的作业很少写. 喜欢一夲书反复读N遍.不过厚厚的书一天可以读一本. -长在红旗下-给 长在红旗下 发送悄悄话 长在红旗下 的博客首页 长在红旗下 的个人群组 (0 bytes) (13 reads) 2/25/13 06:38:15
• 顶! -雾里看花123-给 雾里看花123 发送悄悄话 雾里看花123 的博客首页 雾里看花123 的个人群组 (0 bytes) (9 reads) 2/25/13 06:57:18
• 谢谢!可惜小女中文不会,光英文了。 -长在红旗下-给 长在红旗下 发送悄悄话 长在红旗下 的博客首页 长在红旗下 的个人群组 (0 bytes) (2 reads) 2/25/13 07:01:10
• 这个是天赋哈,知道一个女孩每年都得全国作文诗歌名次,被出版。 -黄桷树-给 黄桷树 发送悄悄话 黄桷树 的个人群组 (0 bytes) (7 reads) 2/25/13 07:20:56
• 谢谢! 我想鼓励她多写.可惜俺闺女是不听任何人的,除非她想干. -长在红旗下-给 长在红旗下 发送悄悄话 长在红旗下 的博客首页 长在红旗下 的个人群组 (0 bytes) (4 reads) 2/25/13 07:37:43
• 不担心,一辈子只写的作家粉成功~~~ -黄桷树-给 黄桷树 发送悄悄话 黄桷树 的个人群组 (0 bytes) (11 reads) 2/25/13 07:41:47
• 哈, 利, 波, 特,居然被自动消失了???? -黄桷树-给 黄桷树 发送悄悄话 黄桷树 的个人群组 (0 bytes) (1 reads) 2/25/13 07:43:22
• 哈利波特是小女第一套最喜欢的, 三年级全套至少读了七八遍. -长在红旗下-给 长在红旗下 发送悄悄话 长在红旗下 的博客首页 长在红旗下 的个人群组 (0 bytes) (3 reads) 2/25/13 07:47:33
• 厉害。未来之星。 -睿睿妈-给 睿睿妈 发送悄悄话 睿睿妈 的博客首页 睿睿妈 的个人群组 (0 bytes) (2 reads) 2/25/13 07:50:52
• 谢谢! 从小她喜欢的东西包括电影,书籍都会看N遍直到背下来. -长在红旗下-给 长在红旗下 发送悄悄话 长在红旗下 的博客首页 长在红旗下 的个人群组 (0 bytes) (5 reads) 2/25/13 07:55:32
• 天赋和坚持加一块儿了!这孩子素质很好! -DUMARTINI-给 DUMARTINI 发送悄悄话 DUMARTINI 的博客首页 DUMARTINI 的个人群组 (0 bytes) (2 reads) 2/25/13 11:51:13
• 谢杜姐捧场! 今天我闺女回家一定跟她说接着写下去! -长在红旗下-给 长在红旗下 发送悄悄话 长在红旗下 的博客首页 长在红旗下 的个人群组 (0 bytes) (1 reads) 2/25/13 12:04:21
• 前途无量! -夏圓-给 夏圓 发送悄悄话 夏圓 的博客首页 夏圓 的个人群组 (0 bytes) (1 reads) 2/25/13 19:28:51
• 谢谢圆圆MM! 哈哈,看来我这羊妈当得不错. -长在红旗下-给 长在红旗下 发送悄悄话 长在红旗下 的博客首页 长在红旗下 的个人群组 (0 bytes) (0 reads) 2/26/13 04:40:53
• Could't believe it's written by a 9-year -九月独处-给 九月独处 发送悄悄话 九月独处 的博客首页 九月独处 的个人群组 (0 bytes) (4 reads) 2/26/13 09:19:26
• 谢谢九月妹! 女儿的想象力是没地说的, 记忆力也好. 这下得鼓励她多写. -长在红旗下-给 长在红旗下 发送悄悄话 长在红旗下 的博客首页 长在红旗下 的个人群组 (0 bytes) (1 reads) 2/26/13 10:19:38
• WOW!~~ -九月独处-给 九月独处 发送悄悄话 九月独处 的博客首页 九月独处 的个人群组 (158 bytes) (6 reads) 2/26/13 09:21:36
   Can't believe it's from a 9-year-old girl, amazing!~~~ she has a tremendous talent in writing and you got to provide more nutrution for her to grow!!~~
• 来晚了,杜姐,圆圆都在我上面。 -粉玫瑰-给 粉玫瑰 发送悄悄话 粉玫瑰 的博客首页 粉玫瑰 的个人群组 (0 bytes) (2 reads) 2/27/13 09:10:16





阿小饼 发表评论于
佩服的不行了额,额让额崽来看来读然后又去TING。。。。。娃娃们的榜样啊。你是怎么教的啊?写写教闺女的事情吧。先谢谢了!

等着看画画的故事。:)
长在红旗下 发表评论于
回复DUMARTINI的评论:
打算写一个她画的画。这阵太忙,下月哈!
长在红旗下 发表评论于
回复白玫瑰花的评论:
谢谢白玫瑰花大才女来访!等过一阵试试。
DUMARTINI 发表评论于
新博客在哪儿啊?
白玫瑰花 发表评论于
你也要多写点啊!要不就post多点你女儿的作品!^_^
白玫瑰花 发表评论于
太有天分了。写的真好!应该鼓励她一直写下去,应该会写的更好!
长在红旗下 发表评论于
回复翠花姐的评论:
谢谢翠花姐来访!你们都是俺的偶像!小女下个月十岁,还太小。正在写Chapter Book。爱好太多.还不知到将来干啥,看以后了哈!
翠花姐 发表评论于
9岁的小女孩写的这样好,真真个小才女哦!是不是遗传了红旗mm的文采天分哦?

太喜欢了,希望mm能多写博文杂谈、儿女经来和大家分享哦!

周末快乐!
长在红旗下 发表评论于
回复阿小饼的评论:
谢谢老朋友光临!俺可不是才女,拉闺女出来显摆显摆。她现在写的小说都不让俺看了。怕俺又那出去特涩。
阿小饼 发表评论于
太油菜了,估计功夫熊猫都不一定是这位小狼的对手呢,写得太精彩了,大力顶起!
阿小饼 发表评论于
先在大才女这里占个座,回头仔细读。:)

才气是可以遗传的,额绝对相信:))
长在红旗下 发表评论于
回复小艾妈妈的评论:
谢谢!才发现我的偶像驾到。
小艾妈妈 发表评论于
羡慕嫉妒,不恨,好有才气的孩子,这是天分,就开怀的笑吧。
DUMARTINI 发表评论于
女儿的想象力明显是遗传来的,我肯定~~~~

谢谢分享,小才女一个 妈妈的骄傲啊!
tenyu 发表评论于
紅旗家裡有這麼好的孩子。跟你一起高興!有個好孩子比有什麼都好。
长在红旗下 发表评论于
再谢圆圆MM! 她的想像力丰富不知从哪来的.我的早被抹杀了,哈哈哈
夏圓 发表评论于
红旗MM, 你女儿很有写作天赋,想像力丰富,我读着读着就被你女儿带进了她创造的世界里。坚持写下去,前途无量!祝贺她得了年级第一,也祝贺你这位好妈妈!
长在红旗下 发表评论于
谢谢老乡.还需再接再厉,继续努力.
粉玫瑰 发表评论于
先恭禧一下,家有小才女!
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