人唤苗郎顾,只得装提素。稍添鱼王油,略加泵兄醋。

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(声明一下,这个已经不是忠实翻译了哈,算自由发挥。以下是经过修改的最新版本,合乎平仄格律、也合韵了。贴子末尾附上昨天尚不完善的初稿)

《鹊桥仙 - 乱世雀情》

汲泉越暮,穿岩过野,骤起无名雀啸。孤身静立试凝神,望水影,苍穹寂照。

经年度日,销颜忘地,屡向故人悲吊。遥乡伫夜意终明,万事尽,清音独绕。

原文:Ornithology in a World of Flux.

It was only a bird call at evening, unidentified,
As I came from the spring with water, across the rocky back-pasture;
But so still I stood sky above was not stiller than sky in pail-water.

Years pass, all places and faces fade, some people have died,
And I stand in a far land, the evening still, and am at last sure
That I miss more that stillness at bird-call than some things
that were to fail later.

昨天的初稿,好几个地方出律,也不合韵:

汲泉越暮,穿石过野,骤有无名鹊噪。孤身静立试凝神,看水影,苍穹不闹。

经年度日,销颜忘地,屡得故人噩告。遥乡伫夜意终明,万事尽,清声独绕。

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