五绝仄起:《春入深院》 --- 迢迢彼雁何时见 --- 2014.04.30

长于知而短于智,多于痴而少于世;不迷于资,不喜于仕;文理古今阅中外,墨白是非论兴衰。【沁文体】: 旧时平水韵律 + 通篇正格平仄 + 通篇奇偶逐字对仗 + 虚笔传意 + 简约流畅 + 力求联间词性交错 + 力避同音。。。封笔于2016.06.22。
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《春入深院》
 迢迢彼雁何时见

(平平仄仄平平仄)

沁文(古来客)
2014.04.30


雁去虽无语,仄仄平平仄
春来自有痕。平平仄仄平(上平十三元韵)
疑人捎远讯,平平平仄仄
叹柳拂深门。仄仄仄平平(上平十三元韵)
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:谐音于 “雨”(泪也)。
:谐音于 “恨”。
:依平水韵为仄声(古今音调相异之 “叛逆者” 一枚),故于此仍持正格平仄。

:西汉司马相如曾为阿娇(汉武帝之表妹兼皇后:亦 “金屋藏娇” 之主人公,后遭武帝冷落,阿娇遂请汉赋大家司马相如为赋以感怀,乃有 “一字千金” 之典故)作幽怨之《门赋》,故沁文几欲取 “门”;然终喜 “庭院深深深几许” 之深,亦 “情” 之也,遂取 “叹柳拂门” 为末句 。。。门犹伫,风自拂;心无诉,人欲哭 。。。

今日乐天陶陶贴发妙词《清平乐---东风携雨》http://bbs.wenxuecity.com/poetry/580816.html),下阕末句为 “惊看窗前池苑,已是姹紫嫣红”,似言万物复苏、风光烂漫、春来有痕之意。沁文甚喜此句,遂即兴应以上述拙作之句一、句二雁去虽无语,春来自有痕。


复念春日已来,然或鸿雁未至,则奈何 “庭院深深深几许”? 遂思王昌龄《闺怨》中 “陌头忽见杨柳色,悔教夫婿觅封侯” 之怨妇愁春句 。。。。。。近日沁文屡蒙诗友乐天陶陶妙启发而得近体拙作若干,亦大抵属于婉风、甚至闺怨系列(试邯郸学步于晏殊、晏几道):秋水有怅,春色含情 。。。然则此情何时可释耶?其(有情人)必曰:“天长地久有时尽,此恨绵绵无绝期 ” (语出白居易《长恨歌》) 。。。


【上平十三元韵】元原源园猿辕坦烦繁蕃樊翻萱喧冤言轩藩魂浑温孙尊存蹲敦墩暾屯豚村盆奔论坤昏婚阍根恩吞沅媛援爰幡番反埙鸳宛掀昆琨鲲扪荪髡跟垠抡蕴犍袁怨蜿溷昆炖饨臀喷纯。
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