《沁园春》 雪 步韵毛泽东
日临东海，晓光如水，碧波如雪。
观千江屏立，青云幻影；万峰叠起，巨浪盈滔。
琼林蝶舞，银枝珠露，连天玉色比心高。
梅开处， 看蒸气沐香，无限妖娆。
千秋风景多娇，
问人间万代谁折腰？
惜群雄逐鹿； 意在王侯； 中山建国，十年风骚。
一介书生， 激扬文字，放飞工农百万雕。
唤神洲， 呼人民万岁，和谐朝朝。
12、26、2008
注：平仄未调整。
《沁园春》 雪 步韵毛泽东
林曦 发表评论于
Thank you so much. You are right. I will correct later.
Happy Niu Year!
Happy Niu Year!
Midway8989 发表评论于
Here is the original Mao's poem:
北国风光，千里冰封，万里雪飘。望长城内外，惟余莽莽；大河上下，顿失滔滔。山舞银蛇，原驰腊象，欲与天公试比高。须晴日，看红装素裹，分外妖娆。
江山如此多娇，引无数英雄竞折腰。惜秦皇汉武，略输文采；唐宗宋祖，稍逊风骚。一代天骄，成吉思汗，只识弯弓射大雕。俱往矣，数风流人物，还看今朝。
In the first line, there is a rhyme. In Mao's 北国风光，千里冰封，万里雪飘, rhyme is "飘"。But yours reads: "日临东海，晓光如水，碧波如雪" the last word "雪" does not rhyme with the following sequence. So, there may be something wrong here.
Very nice try. Very glad to read it.
Happy (Chinese) new year.
北国风光，千里冰封，万里雪飘。望长城内外，惟余莽莽；大河上下，顿失滔滔。山舞银蛇，原驰腊象，欲与天公试比高。须晴日，看红装素裹，分外妖娆。
江山如此多娇，引无数英雄竞折腰。惜秦皇汉武，略输文采；唐宗宋祖，稍逊风骚。一代天骄，成吉思汗，只识弯弓射大雕。俱往矣，数风流人物，还看今朝。
In the first line, there is a rhyme. In Mao's 北国风光，千里冰封，万里雪飘, rhyme is "飘"。But yours reads: "日临东海，晓光如水，碧波如雪" the last word "雪" does not rhyme with the following sequence. So, there may be something wrong here.
Very nice try. Very glad to read it.
Happy (Chinese) new year.
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