京剧《穆桂英挂帅》选段
穆桂英由李洁扮演
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猛听得金鼓响画角声震
唤起我破天门壮志凌云
想当年桃花马上威风凛凛
敌血飞溅石榴裙
有生之日责当尽
寸土怎能够属于他人
番王小丑何足论
我一剑能挡百万的兵
Golden drums and painted bugles started pounding.
Break the Fortress to Heaven! My soaring aspiration is waken.
I recall back then I fought majestically on my Peach Blossom.
All over my vermeil skirt, enemy blood spattering.
As long as I am alive, it is an obligation
To keep every inch of our land from intrusion.
The bandit chief and fighters are worthless dummy clowns.
With one sword, I can block attacking soldiers a million.
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*************** 以下为网友们的讨论意见及修改过程 ******************
Painted bugles arise(s) while golden drums pounding.
Awakening (is) are my soaring aspirations
To break the trigram named Gate-to-Heaven.
Memories flash of the past:
On my Peach Blossom, gallantly I was fighting.
All over my vermeil skirt, was the enemy blood spattering.
I have to fulfill my liftime obligations(.)
To keep every inch of my land from intruding.
The Fan chief(tian)tain and bandits are worthless to mention.
With one single sword, I can block troops a million.
* * * 解释如下 * * *
猛听得金鼓响画角声震
Painted bugles arises while golden drums pounding.
self, 关于“金”和“鼓”，下面是我们家昨晚的讨论：
二哥：想起来你早上译的那句“金鼓响...”，金和鼓应该是两样不同的乐器。
二姐：看来是我书读得太少了。论坛上一早就有人指出这个问题了。
二哥：他们是怎么说的？
二姐：他们提到“鸣金收兵”，推断这里的“金”肯定不是gold. 我当时留意
的是这个“金”是金子还是金人的，因为戏词都极注重对仗和工整，
后面用的是“画角”，所以前面应为golden drum. 如果这里是说的“锣”、
“鼓”和“号”的话，听起来是有些别扭的。
二小：What are you guys talking about? Explain it in English to me!
二姐：Mom mistook a two word phrase 金鼓 as golden drum, or 金色的鼓。
But it actually should be two musical instruments, one is a piece of metal
shaped like a pot lid, which is for you to hold in one hand and stike with
the other; the other is a drum.
二小：I see. A gong and a drum.
二哥：是啊，要不怎么能“金鼓齐鸣”呢！
二姐：嗯。。。“金鼓齐鸣”形容战争激烈，“鸣金收兵”，“战鼓催征” 。。。
二哥：这“金”是收兵的时候敲的！这句戏词写的有问题。
-- 问题讨论清楚了以后，我决定将错就错，还是用我原来的翻译，因为它在听觉之外，还有一些视觉效应。
唤起我破天门壮志凌云
Awakening is my soaring aspirations
To break the trigram named Gate-to-Heaven.
喜欢billnet 的"awakening is ..."句型，又想保留soaring aspiration.
这里的“天门”，说的是“天门阵”，我前面用fortess是苦于找不到"阵"这个词怎么说。谢谢武都水坝的反馈，觉得这个trigram是最接近原意的一个词。
破阵，我能想到的合适的动词，是break和crack，比较之下，觉得break好些。那时候打仗跟现在不一样，这“破阵”恐怕脑力劳动还较多一些。文青，请替我问问，在这种情况下，storm还合适吗？
想当年桃花马上威风凛凛
Memories flash of the past:
On my Peach Blossom, gallantly I was fighting.
Thanks self and 文青 for the word gallantly.
敌血飞溅石榴裙
All over my vermeil skirt, was the enemy blood spattering.
我想留一些动感在里面，会不会有些弄巧成拙了？
有生之日责当尽
I have to fulfill my liftime obligations(.)
文青：故事是这样讲的，穆桂英因为朝廷的不公，原想推托，不愿挂帅出征的。这里有思想转变
的过程。所以这句强调的不是跟敌人战斗的决心，而是说给自己听，劝解自己的。
寸土怎能够属于他人
To keep every inch of my land from intruding.
番王小丑何足论
The Fan chieftian and bandits are worthless to mention.
self, 觉得最好时留下这个“番”字，如果是给老外看，就在文后加注释。
我一剑能挡百万的兵
With one single sword, I can block troops a million
************之后还有一段关于“番王小丑”的讨论**************
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