ONE NIGHT I STOPPED TO PEE IN A POPPY FIELD
IN OREGON & I HEARD A BEAUTIFUL SONG
I remembered the fun, as a kid
how I loved pissing in the fresh
snow to see the little bullets
like golden rain drops piercing
through the perfect shiny surface
of the white powder out in the cold!
It was instinctive of a boy
to mark his name on virgin snow
Sometimes there were more
of us standing with little peckers
in hands and competed until
the last boy ran out of ammunition
Tonight, what I am holding in my hand
has grown bigger, darker and hairier
with years of hiding outside the sun
(also the fondling and measuring
in the way a monk or a nun plays
with the prayer pearls with eyes closed)
Standing at the edge of a poppy field
in the center of moonlight and silence
I take my time slow, feeling each sound
in the joy of pissing in the wide open
inhaling the fragrant night & ghosts
from past rains in small heavens
If you were here, I would let you
(not unlike a firewoman holding
the hose aiming at the heart
of wild fire) control the violence
of a man, like a little girl
learning to fire a gun
. . . .
If the body really housed a soul
that was when I heard the song
in the poppy field outside of town
two bodies wrestled as one
to the melody of eternity
between a woman and her man
in the fertile land of love
where a woman and a man
can truly become one
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z.z. 2006
[art by roi james]
我很喜欢脑筋激荡:) 肯定A绝对没有要非B。。。很多时候我同意YY说的,便没有重复,受启发而言他:)。。。“幽默是水做的”,我想我没有不尊重或不爱动物的意思,动物也有灵魂,但人与动物的唯一区别是人有individual soul, each animal is a part of a group soul.
“把幽默来分别人兽,好像亚理士多德是第一个。他在《动物学》里说:“人是唯—能笑的动物。””
“自然界如飞禽走兽之类,喜怒爱惧,无不发为适当的声音,只缺乏表示幽默的笑声。” (水做的幽默:)
所以我觉得幽默诗很难,就像Freedom很难,为一个unchained soul/spirit(individual soul?)很难,“not the kind of freedom mostpeople talk about....it is the kind of freedom with discipline in artistic expression, and close to the unchained soul/spirit...."
“一切的艺术不过是拨云见日的...风起云涌, 如妄想杂念, 来去无踪...”自由谈何容易。。。“but, the sense of 自由 is expressed in real 艺术 ...”
maybe that is why many people are afraid of poetry...:)
however, 艺术 does not equal 自由 ...
a lot of 艺术 have very little to do with true 自由 ...
but, the sense of 自由 is expressed in real 艺术 ...
i remember that we talked about Love on here before ...that is, Love does not
necessarily mean Freedom ... some poeple Love in order to Control/Manipulate...
but, Freedom is found in true Love....
thanks....
律周 发表评论于
that is FREEDOM....
not the kind of freedom mostpeople talk about....it is the kind of freedom with discipline in artistic expression, and close to the unchained soul/spirit....
"silly" "romantic" poems and "humor" poems :) 其实更难写....:))
"this poem is actually a humorous poem, at least i intended it to be....
you are touching on a very important point, or element in poetry, that is FREEDOM....
not the kind of freedom mostpeople talk about....it is the kind of freedom with discipline in artistic expression, and close to the unchained soul/spirit...."
老实说,读到题目:“ONE NIGHT I STOPPED TO PEE IN A POPPY FIELD
IN OREGON & I HEARD A BEAUTIFUL SONG“,我联想到Miller在“Black Spring”里骑着自行车,停下来to pee。。。老实说那是我非常喜欢的一段,也是一种自由的感觉。。。我在琢磨的是那是一个"Saturday Afternoon",而这里是“One Night”。。。“幽默(Humour)的拉丁文原意是液体。。。幽默是水做的。”。。。
very interesting observation.....:) not far from the truth though....
this poem is actually a humorous poem, at least i intended it to be....
you are touching on a very important point, or element in poetry, that is FREEDOM....
not the kind of freedom mostpeople talk about....it is the kind of freedom with discipline in artistic expression, and close to the unchained soul/spirit....
that is what i am looking for in poetry.....
so, welcome to share more ideas/thoughts.....always a pleasure to meet new friends and hear more on art/poetry....
obviously, zf has benefited greatly from reading Miller....:)
thanks for the candid feedback!!!!
"我还不是一个好读者,因为我还不知该如何说出这首诗歌的美...."
you are being "qian xu"....any kind of interpretation helps me in making poems.....though i don't care too much about what others say.....but i appreciate friends' feedback on here...
“…Only a few discerning souls seem to be able to reconcile the so-called contradictory aspects of my being as revealed through my writing. (Henry Miller, The World of Sex)”
我还不是一个好读者,因为我还不知该如何说出这首诗歌的美,但我很欣赏很欣赏。。。谢谢分享!
LTG 发表评论于
!!!!!!
:))
it is only
meant
to
be
peeeeeeeeeked
metaphori-
cally
!!!!
:)
影云 发表评论于
watch out, watch out . . . i am peeking at you
:)
very imagery :)
love the fun scattering and joyful feelings floating
in almost every word . . .