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"露从今夜白,月是故乡明"



古句英译初探,回忆“德利三步法”



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"露从今夜白,月是故乡明"

古句初探,运用“德利三步法” 思吾友 德利 李唐 两君




Sentences:

01:现有白话句:

Look, the morning dew so clean and white, formed through night,

the moon hung high up tonight, reminds me the home moonlight.



02 初稿:

"Stars falling from sky high become the morning dew, brightens tonight D' moonlight home"



03调整音节音律及韵:成如下句:(就是长了点)

  1. "Twilight fall from sky, tonight, morning dew clean n' white, silver shines in home soft moonlight." -First


  2. "Twilight fall from sky, tonight, morning dew clean n' white, soft moon home, shines with delight."-Optional

  3. "Twilight falls tonight, morning dew white, soft moon home, shines with delight."-

    Concise


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一语译





July 14, 2009



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2009 七月 湖边



一语湖边_lakeshore 发表评论于
但据另外的帖子:here,the “露”做节气“白露”解,特记!
一语湖边_lakeshore 发表评论于
露从今夜白”说明了当时的时令实在白露,同时又给作者一种凄凉,寒意之感,意思是“叶上的白露从今夜开始,才发现是白的”,

“而天上的月亮还是故乡的比较明亮”(这一句尤其关键,明明是同一轮明月,而作者却固执地认为故乡的比较白,更令得读者体会到他的思乡情节)

The morning dew becomes frost since tonight;
White like the moon over my home, always bright

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