[七律]-抱病打油 步筐兄韵 BY 雨清
风寒枕热摸灯行,
夜半黄连苦素心.
唯见月圆浮碧水,
偏余骨瘦抱红衾.
失眠求佛千钟粟,
伏案翻书万斗金.
云掩梦乡和泪看,
琉璃旧瓦古飞禽.
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附筐兄原诗: 无病打油 BY一筐 于 2006-04-17 18:19:48
雪月风花皆在意,油盐酱醋不从心.难将苦句沽清酒,且籍纤灰典薄衾
欲笑红尘思五斗,唯凭幻梦散千金.闹春重是尚书杏,伴舞长物处士禽
[七律]-抱病打油 步韵
欲笑红尘思五斗,唯凭幻梦散千金.闹春重是尚书杏,伴舞长物处士禽
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Yuqing,
How do you compare your recent poems, especially Lv Shi, to those your wrote a couple months ago? Do you see improvement? I remembered someone called you Da4 Shi4 after reading the first couple Lv Shi of yours :)
There was a question about Ze4 Yun4 Wu3 Jue2 on the forum. MengZhongNv answered that there was no such thing. I am sure many people knew it was the opposite. But they chose not to correct her.
This is my suggestion: don't try to compose fast, try to make it better instead. Refrain yourself from Da2 or He4 others since it is hard enough for you to write freely.
Good luck with writing better poems.
Sean
How do you compare your recent poems, especially Lv Shi, to those your wrote a couple months ago? Do you see improvement? I remembered someone called you Da4 Shi4 after reading the first couple Lv Shi of yours :)
There was a question about Ze4 Yun4 Wu3 Jue2 on the forum. MengZhongNv answered that there was no such thing. I am sure many people knew it was the opposite. But they chose not to correct her.
This is my suggestion: don't try to compose fast, try to make it better instead. Refrain yourself from Da2 or He4 others since it is hard enough for you to write freely.
Good luck with writing better poems.
Sean
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